2004-08-21
Brdwaybebe
Version - God So Loved The World
Username: Since I've clicked on it before reviewing you, I'm going to have to admit that I like it. I'm not partial to the "bebe" part; in fact, I really don't like the word "baby" however you choose to spell it. But mentioning Broadway drew me in. (4/5)
Title: It matches your layout, as well as some of your writing. It's a good choice, but for some reason I wish you had picked something a little more... personal. (3/5)
Content: I started here, and I noticed that you haven't archived your entries for a few months. You should consider doing so. Anyway, I really enjoyed this entry. I especially liked this question: "Who do you believe: your senses, or the Expert?" I had to stop and think about that. So often we trust our instincts when we really shouldn't. It was great that you put this article in your diary, but it would have been perfect had you added your own thoughts about it.
I was really excited by this entry. Lately I have been noticing God's hand in my own life, and it was neat to read how He's working in someone else's.
This entry is the best I've read so far. You do a great job of just saying how you feel. I love your statements "I want to help. I want to count." That sounds so much like something I would write myself.
I liked this entry as well. You admit that you are not perfect and list the things you need to do to improve. It's always great to see someone who can acknowledge their imperfections and is willing to work on them.
I love this one. Oh wow. Very well written. You say everything I've been thinking but haven't been able to articulate into words. I love it.
I really enjoy your writing style, and I think you're quite talented. I do wish, however, that you would explain more about why you feel a certain way or need to change a certain behavior. You rarely give specifics, and I think I would be more interested in your plans and intentions if I knew why you wanted to do those things. (17/20)
Layout: Major problem. I can't get any of the links on your drop-down "extras" menu to work. I'm really upset about that because I wanted to read more about you. Maybe it's just my computer, but you might want to check it out to make sure.
I hate to say it, but I think I liked your old white layout better. This black seems a little too depressing for your style of writing. I like the image, but I liked your old images as well. I'm assuming you designed it, so I'm giving you a few extra points. (22/30)
Stalker Points: You have a contact link, but I can't access it because it's under "extras". You do have a link to your notes, though, so I'll give you some points. (5/10)
Extra Stuff: You have a link, but I can't get to any of them. I will, however, give you some credit for all of your links. (5/10)
Grammar: It's pretty good. A few slip-ups here and there, but nothing too horrible. (9/10)
Link: I couldn't find it today, but I know it was on your diary before you changed layouts. (5/10)
Total: (70/100)
Comments/Favorites: I apologize for making you wait so long for your review. I'm also sorry about your score because I really did enjoy what I got to read. Keep up the good work!
Reviewed By: Mary
hotpinkviews at 11:18 a.m.