2003-11-04
chi-angel
Take me dancing in the moonlight
Content: I truly do apologize for the wait; some things are completely out of my control. So here I am, ready to tell you exactly what I think. Here it goes...
I searched all over to try to determine your age. Maybe I missed it somewhere, but I didn't find it. I'm going to assume you're younger than me by the way you write. You talk about your friends, your day, boys, items on the average teenage thought stream. Nothing too awful, nothing racist, nothing terribly explicit (though I wasn't fond of your frequent use of profanity. A lot of it I thought was unneccesary, and apparently someone else did too.) It is perfectly fine for you to vent your frustrations... I tend to do the same thing in my diary. But it's probably not a good idea to use the person's real name or specific details. A lot of people get upset when you write bad things about them, and I speak from experience. It's better to just use psedonyms or not even mention names at all.
Besides that, I found that you didn't really have any profound thoughts. Just the average daily grind, no personal theories or humor. It seemed mainly like you just use the diary as a venting ground. And since you've only got a small number of entries, I know it takes time to get into the swing of things. But try talking about the good things in your life, about the good people, and the positive things. No, I'm not overly optimistic... I just get tired of people complaining about things. Do something about boys if they anger you. Tell your friends if they upset you. There's nothing worse than hearing about a backstabbing friend through the grapevine (or a diary). Take action and use those thoughts I know you possess. Anyone can make a difference. (10/20)
Layout: I like it. It fits you, and since I loved A Walk to Remember, I actually understood your diary title. It's nothing extra special, but it's not horrible either.(40/40)
Stalker Points: Guestbook, notes, email, AIM, and a tagboard.(10/10)
Extra Stuff: Nothing really beside your cast page, review page, and a little bio. May I suggest 101 things about yourself or something else that would allow the reader to know more about your perspective? (3/10)
Grammar:Not really outstanding. Your profanity was a bit much for me, and some sentences I had to read several times in order to figure them out. But overall it was okay. (5/10)
Link: Yup, it's there, and it works. (10/10)
Total: (78/100)
Comments/Favorites: My sincere apology for the wait. I'll be back to check on your progress.
Reviewed By: Mary
hotpinkviews at 5:03 p.m.